My writings :3

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I'm a writer by nature, however, I'm also lazy by nature, so every once in a while I write something. I've written a few things while I've been at school, here, take a peek:

A Time in the Life of Nyrin
A Time in the Life of Nyrin Pt. 2
A Time in the Life of Nyrin Pt. 3

Not so much fanfic, however :/ I hope you enjoy, they're all short reads, and I'm trying to finish it.

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:27 am

he's weird o.o

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But, but, but, I'm a girl :c

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:49 am

whatever

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Stop hurting me Mack, you're hur- Wait, why am I doing that here? This isn't Funnyjunk.

:c

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Tue Dec 14, 2010 1:53 am

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Tue Dec 14, 2010 2:13 am

btw, Nyrin is a guy (I can confirm this 100%)

so, no more trap shenanigans. Kthnx

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Sci wrote:: btw, Nyrin is a guy (I can confirm this 100%)

so, no more trap shenanigans. Kthnx

AWWE D: YOU RUINED IT :c

Sci's lying ;-;

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Tue Dec 14, 2010 10:31 pm

Nyrin Triball wrote:

Sci wrote:: btw, Nyrin is a guy (I can confirm this 100%)

so, no more trap shenanigans. Kthnx

AWWE D: YOU RUINED IT :c

Sci's lying ;-;

lier

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Wed Dec 15, 2010 8:11 am

Sorry, I was unable to read your writings.

I was distracted by your signature.

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Everybody should be seen as a guy unless there is 100% proof to the contrary. nod

(Internet only)

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Wed Dec 15, 2010 4:58 pm

I on the other hand, think there is actually more girls than guys on the internet

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Well, the attempt to stay female failed, HOWEVER! Sometime tonight I'll get some more writing up. EXPECT SOME!

Subject: Re: My writings :3 Thu Dec 16, 2010 5:20 pm

Nice job, Nyrin.

Each chapter is better than the last. There's plenty of imagery, which makes it an interesting read. I enjoyed the bit about bacon the best.

And this made me laugh:

He was sentenced to room 148, to where he'd be confined for seven hours a day in solitary confinement to do his studies for the next ten weeks.

I wouldn't use the same large word twice in a sentence though, sounds a bit repetitive. The part about the street lights is good, but I think it might be a run on or something.

Keep up the good work. Smile

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Stop reading and get to studying, Sutan!

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I did my final today, so no more studying! Woo! I probably failed my course anyways.

Thanks for the feedback Sutan, I'll get to finding an alternative for "confine" or "confinement", and I'll work with that run on sentence.

Edit: Edits worked in, I hope those work better now. Couldn't fix the run on, but I changed the wording to make it flow better.

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DOUBLE POST OF GREAT JUSTICE:
A Time in the Life of Nyrin pt. 4
There you guys go, part four is up and ready to read :3